stryyker wrote:
Now, aside from being able to assert my linguistic skills into a situation, doesn't that situation feel.... Wrong?
To answer your question...Yes, it absolutely does smell like any other patriotic chain email that dedicated wingnuts insist on keeping me on their list for sending me (sorry Mom!). Fortunately, at least you were original enough to write your own prose, and with a little spell-checking, you might be able to mass mail this Patriotic(TM) tear-jerker and reach millions.
I'll tell you from two perspectives...first, being in BDU's for a majority of my time for 9 years, I have never experienced anything like you say. Even walking through the center (accidently) of an anti-war protest in Germany, I've never experienced anything like this. I have experienced a lot of random kindness, thank you's, etc., from all age groups and in all different places, but never anything like this from my 2 years near Monterrey, CA, my 2 years in Newport News, VA, or my year in Ft. Sill. Even the Koreans at the height of being virulently anti-american could still be caught giving up seats for me in crowded restaurants during my tour there. So, on the count of this being absolutely true, I call bullshit.
My second perspective, as a game designer/magazing writer for the last 3 years, will say this is a great pro-American wingnut piece and plays perfectly to a rightwing audience. You've managed to hit almost every point -
- A few "snotty lib" stereotype strawmen
- A little "Vietnam vets are baby killers" nostalgia
- The color "red" carefully included
- You've got a big American flag conveniently hanging around...at least there wasn't a bible in your story somewhere too, or did I miss it?
- The "Persecuted Hero" by those that just "couldn't understand"
- Good calm military speech-making, hoo-rah devil dog...
- I'm proud to be an American, where at least I know I'm freeeeeeeeeeeeee...
- A good solid "wink" at the reader with the last line. Bravo (seriously!).
If this was indeed your completely original work, I'd say you have solid writing potential for someone your age. A little real life experience and a little better command of vocabulary and you'd be easily competing with Bill Kristol, and blow away Malkin or Coulter. I do wish you the best in your career as a US Marine and writer. Smokejumper school is Goodfellow AFB, one of my alma maters as well...just don't get caught near the bunkers no matter what she says about "nobody is around", you'll be trying to convince some Air Force SP with a nervous tick to put down his weapon before anyone gets hurt. Again, enjoy your future career, and keep up the writing, you never know when it will come in handy.
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