were you that chubby boy?
You should give your friend a name. That way you can refer to him in other ways than 'him, he, my friend'. Also humanizes it a bit.
Happy fucking February
Remember Me As A Time Of Day
thank you, but honestly, i don't think i can just take somebody else's writing and use it as my own. it's not that i'm against copying and stuff, it's just that in my mind, i honestly don't see why or how your version is better or worse than mine. aren't they just different ways of saying the same thing?Jay wrote:
My story begins with my family and I moving to a new neighborhood when I was in the sixth grade. Shortly after arriving, I decided to explore the neighborhood and came upon a group of boys who were playing with a wasp tied to a length of string. They were taking the wasp for a walk as if it were a dog. I asked them how they managed to tie the string to a living wasp, and a chubby little boy piped up and explained how it was accomplished. (Explanation of how here). That chubby little boy became my best friend and one of my greatest influences.
yeah true. done.Macbeth wrote:
You should give your friend a name. That way you can refer to him in other ways than 'him, he, my friend'. Also humanizes it a bit.
Don't use numbers. Spell it out.
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/735/02/Macbeth wrote:
Don't use numbers. Spell it out.
than again, am i not supposed to use that for formal essays?For cardinal numbers, consult individual entries in the Associated Press Stylebook. If no usage is specified, spell out numbers below 10 and use figures for numbers 10 and above. Example: The man had five children and 11 grandchildren.
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I would follow that recommendation. Below 10, spell them, above 10, use numerals.
Remember Me As A Time Of Day
I just remembered from elementary school that they told us to spell it out unless it's a huge number or a stat. I could be wrong. Where is Uzi when you need jim
You should follow the recommendation of the school you are applying too. Lolheggs wrote:
I would follow that recommendation. Below 10, spell them, above 10, use numerals.
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That works too. I didn't bother to read much of the thread earlier on, so this would be the preferred method.Macbeth wrote:
You should follow the recommendation of the school you are applying too. Lolheggs wrote:
I would follow that recommendation. Below 10, spell them, above 10, use numerals.
Remember Me As A Time Of Day
yeah but how am i supposed to know their recommendations
thisheggs wrote:
I would follow that recommendation. Below 10, spell them, above 10, use numerals.
I agree, unless you are talking dates/maths/etc.Macbeth wrote:
I just remembered from elementary school that they told us to spell it out unless it's a huge number or a stat. I could be wrong. Where is Uzi when you need jim
honestly the worst part of the assignment was the realization that my generation doesn't necessarily have its own "The Times They Are A-Changin'". seems all the music these days is about bitches and hos and gettin' dat green.
i was tempted to do a Mastodon album but it's hard to relate the cosmic struggle of a quadriplegic and Grigori Rasputin to my generation
i was tempted to do a Mastodon album but it's hard to relate the cosmic struggle of a quadriplegic and Grigori Rasputin to my generation
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eh whatever fuck it. a teacher edited for me and he said it was fine. isn't that good enough?
If you can't see why mine is written better then you're hopelessHaiBai wrote:
thank you, but honestly, i don't think i can just take somebody else's writing and use it as my own. it's not that i'm against copying and stuff, it's just that in my mind, i honestly don't see why or how your version is better or worse than mine. aren't they just different ways of saying the same thing?Jay wrote:
My story begins with my family and I moving to a new neighborhood when I was in the sixth grade. Shortly after arriving, I decided to explore the neighborhood and came upon a group of boys who were playing with a wasp tied to a length of string. They were taking the wasp for a walk as if it were a dog. I asked them how they managed to tie the string to a living wasp, and a chubby little boy piped up and explained how it was accomplished. (Explanation of how here). That chubby little boy became my best friend and one of my greatest influences.
"Ah, you miserable creatures! You who think that you are so great! You who judge humanity to be so small! You who wish to reform everything! Why don't you reform yourselves? That task would be sufficient enough."
-Frederick Bastiat
-Frederick Bastiat
Oh shit, creative writing discussion!
Finally, its my time to shine
Finally, its my time to shine
I just read some of it.
Jay was 100% right about the first line. It simply had to be scrapped.
I dont know if its just google docs or my PC, but if i were you i would remove the big spacings between lines> It makes it annoying to read and it looks like a 10-year-old made it.
I have no idea what it's for and what your, so to speak, target audience is, but it is very simplistic writing so if it for anything academic i would try it spice it up a bit more vocabulary-wise, but be careful, because it could come off as forced and have an opposite effect (making it look dumber)
Maybe i should read the whole thing and all posts after and before it before i comment, but i just cba
Jay was 100% right about the first line. It simply had to be scrapped.
I dont know if its just google docs or my PC, but if i were you i would remove the big spacings between lines> It makes it annoying to read and it looks like a 10-year-old made it.
I have no idea what it's for and what your, so to speak, target audience is, but it is very simplistic writing so if it for anything academic i would try it spice it up a bit more vocabulary-wise, but be careful, because it could come off as forced and have an opposite effect (making it look dumber)
Maybe i should read the whole thing and all posts after and before it before i comment, but i just cba
i guess soJay wrote:
If you can't see why mine is written better then you're hopelessHaiBai wrote:
thank you, but honestly, i don't think i can just take somebody else's writing and use it as my own. it's not that i'm against copying and stuff, it's just that in my mind, i honestly don't see why or how your version is better or worse than mine. aren't they just different ways of saying the same thing?Jay wrote:
My story begins with my family and I moving to a new neighborhood when I was in the sixth grade. Shortly after arriving, I decided to explore the neighborhood and came upon a group of boys who were playing with a wasp tied to a length of string. They were taking the wasp for a walk as if it were a dog. I asked them how they managed to tie the string to a living wasp, and a chubby little boy piped up and explained how it was accomplished. (Explanation of how here). That chubby little boy became my best friend and one of my greatest influences.
it's a college admissions essay. and it's standard to double space everything here so it's easier for teachers to grade it, but either way it shouldn't matterKampframmer wrote:
I just read some of it.
Jay was 100% right about the first line. It simply had to be scrapped.
I dont know if its just google docs or my PC, but if i were you i would remove the big spacings between lines> It makes it annoying to read and it looks like a 10-year-old made it.
I have no idea what it's for and what your, so to speak, target audience is, but it is very simplistic writing so if it for anything academic i would try it spice it up a bit more vocabulary-wise, but be careful, because it could come off as forced and have an opposite effect (making it look dumber)
Maybe i should read the whole thing and all posts after and before it before i comment, but i just cba
anyway, idk. fuck writing
Believe it or not, the lay-out is a big part of writing, in fact, playing around with it is an entire sub-category (mainly in poetry though) within creative writing. Unless its mandatory, i would remove the double spacings.HaiBai wrote:
it's a college admissions essay. and it's standard to double space everything here so it's easier for teachers to grade it, but either way it shouldn't matterKampframmer wrote:
I just read some of it.
Jay was 100% right about the first line. It simply had to be scrapped.
I dont know if its just google docs or my PC, but if i were you i would remove the big spacings between lines> It makes it annoying to read and it looks like a 10-year-old made it.
I have no idea what it's for and what your, so to speak, target audience is, but it is very simplistic writing so if it for anything academic i would try it spice it up a bit more vocabulary-wise, but be careful, because it could come off as forced and have an opposite effect (making it look dumber)
Maybe i should read the whole thing and all posts after and before it before i comment, but i just cba
anyway, idk. fuck writing
I guess it's alright for a college admission since their standards wont be too high for such an assignment (unless you plan on studying english).
And 'fuck writing'? Really? College material right here folks.
No fuck writing indeed. Writing papers on shit you know inside and out just to prove you actually comprehend the class is annoying.
/ angry he has a 20 page paper on colonialism
ive written a grand total of 1 paper in 3 years of university. and that wasnt even a class i needed. fuck writing is entirely legit
If you do comprehend it, dont bitch. 20 pages isn't THAT much.Macbeth wrote:
No fuck writing indeed. Writing papers on shit you know inside and out just to prove you actually comprehend the class is annoying.
I would be more worried if you wouldn't know a single thing about the subject and then had to write 20 pages on it.